#8Sunday To sleep, perchance to dream…of a good man
My eight sentences for Weekend Writing Warriors this week come from my first western, Wild West Succubus.
I’ve tweaked the text slightly from the published book to keep the spoilers out of it and to make it eight sentences.
I’m too tired to ride, a unique sensation I seem to have forgotten since turning succubus. Hugo steers me to the hotel to get a room for the night. He offers to sleep on the floor, a noble offer I accept. I collapse fully clothed on the bed, and fall asleep. I dream—of William, of Caleb, of Carlton, and of Hugo, especially Hugo—all the truly good men I have known in my long life.
The sun has barely begun to rise above the horizon when its first rays steal into our tiny room and waken me.
I stretch, surprised at how sore I am. When I glance Hugo’s way, he’s awake, sitting in the chair, watching me.
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Beautiful writing, my friend! WWS is one of my favorites and is filled with depth and descriptive detail. You bring the reader right into the story.
Thanks, Sandra. I really appreciate your kind words.
Just from this snippet, I’m ready to read the book. Glad it’s available now. I’m having a succubus over for Labor Day weekend. 🙂
Thank you so much, Gem! I hope you enjoy it.
Nice descriptive writing, Lila. I like how she dreams about the good men in her long life. That sentence packs a wallop. Nicely done! 🙂
Thanks, Teresa. This is one of my favorite scenes in the book, so I’m really happy it’s getting a few thumbs up.
A beautiful sequence. It ends on a nice note of tension, too, with Hugo watching her. I want to read more 🙂
Thanks, Alex! I’m glad you noted that shift in the mood. 🙂
The regret of the immortal—alwyas poignant!
Is Hugo her love, then, rather than just her lover?
Hugo is not her lover, though it’s clear he has feelings for her by this point. He’s been fighting his attraction to her almost from the beginning, however, because of what she is and what he is.
I love the way you pull us in with the dreamy quality and then hit us with the unexpected last line. Fabulous. 🙂
Thanks, SJ. For 2 very confident people, this scene really sums up how vulnerable they’ve allowed themselves to become with the other.
Excellent choice for your 8! I’m hooked and cannot wait to read.
Thank you, J.A. I’m so glad it struck a favorable chord with you. 🙂
I know that “too tired to…” (fill in the blank) feeling all too well — you captured it beautifully.(Sadly, I don’t have anyone to steer me when I’m like that, though.)
Gah…tell me about it. Would always be nice to have someone to lean on in those exhausted moments. Thanks for visiting and for leaving such a nice comment.
Well written — almost….poetic.
I liked it.
Thank you, FC! 🙂
Nice details. I wonder what he’s thinking when he watches her?
Good question. Hugo is rather enigmatic the entire story. I may have to let him have his say one day. Thanks for visiting, Frank.
I know it’s often a stalker’s action to watch a woman while she sleeps, but I still think it’s a nice romantic touch in a book. Great snippet, Lila. 🙂
LOL…never thought of that. I hope people don’t think Hugo is like Edward from Twilight. Eek!! He’s not…mostly…well, maybe a little teeny bit.
Interesting snippet, and I like the tender memories she carries of the wonderful men she’s had in her life.
Thanks! Priscilla’s been on a quite a journey to get to this point, which you can’t really tell from the snippet so much, being out of context and all.
For a long time I didn’t like western, I must admit I was influenced by the G.F. Unger series, a german dime novel series. An you can search romance with a microscope, then you mighht find some.
But lately I discovered that there are westerns I like around. This seems to be one of them.
I’m new to the western sub-genre of romance too, Ute. I’ve really enjoyed all the ones I’ve read so far and felt inspired to give it a try. Thanks for dropping by! 🙂
This is beautiful. You say so much in so few lines. I really enjoyed it.
Thank you, Linda. I appreciate your kind words.
A beautifully written snippet, where one woman can remember the good men in her life. Those good men that helped shape her into the woman she is now.
Thank you, Sandy for that lovely comment. 🙂